Blackened, by Eve (PG-13)

[sg-fignewton.livejournal.com]

Rec Category: Teamy goodness

Pairing: none
Categories: team, gen, drama, friendship, action/adventure
Warnings: team whumping, violence
Author on LJ: unknown
Author's Website: Eve’s fics at Gateworld
Link: Blackened

Why This Must Be Read: This exciting story has a distinct episodic feel, with  each member of SG-1 getting a chance to shine in the spotlight.

A collapsing floor leaves SG-1 trapped offworld, knowing it will be days before a rescue team is sent after them. As time slowly passes, different members of the team begin to act strangely out-of-character. Is it just irritation and pain causing them to snipe at one another, or is there something else happening – something deadly?

Eve writes a fair mystery here, as the clues are right there in front of us. It took me nearly as long as Daniel to figure out what was really happening. Why not read this fic yourself, and see how long it takes you? :)

Drama and teamy goodness and friendship, sprinkled with bits of humor and one of the best, unexpected lines you’ll ever imagine Teal’c saying. Read this one and enjoy!
 

"So, you thought of anything yet, Major?"

A wry smile on her face, Sam replied, "Well, sir, how about... am I bleeding?"

Jack was about to quip that he didn't know that one when the impact of the statement got to him.

"Where?!"

She turned her head and Jack saw a line of black liquid running down her face. Rubbing it carefully, he saw more land on the back of his hand. He looked upwards.

Remembering himself, he said, "You're not bleeding. It's something dripping out of the device. Feels kinda oily."

Daniel's voice appeared, "Uh, guys...?"

"Daniel?"

"What's that sound?"

Listening, Jack heard a metallic groaning. As it grew in volume, the whole place began to shake again. Knowing there was nothing he could do for himself, he said, "Daniel, get Teal'c over next to the wall!"

As Daniel began to try moving Teal'c, Jack stretched himself as far as he could to try and keep Carter sheltered from any loose masonry that might fall. Ducking his head, he heard an explosion and, suddenly, it was raining stone. Yow! Sharp stones. Not big ones but painful when they stabbed into the exposed flesh of his neck. There was also the unpleasant feeling like cold yoghurt running down his back.

After a few seconds, Jack realised that the shaking had ceased and, tentatively, looked up. Around him and Carter, there was a pool of that same black liquid. Scattered in it, there were shards of what looked to be black glass. That would be the sharp rain then. As if to confirm it, he felt back to his neck and, sure enough, found several chunks of the black crystal embedded there. Carefully levering them out, he heard Carter say, "Sir?"

"We're okay, Major."

"I... sir, I think I'm starting to see something."

Before Jack could say anything, Daniel said, "Are you two okay?"

Looking up with black slime dripping down his face, Jack replied, "Oh just peachy, Daniel." 

Comments

[winterstar95.livejournal.com]

Ohhh! I read this one a while back. Liked it, though there was a few grammar errors here and there I could live with. Just one thing I didn't like - the demand for feedback. I know (as a writer myself) that I love to get feedback. But you know, some people just don't do that sort of thing. I read it on the Stargate Novel Archive and there was a demand for feedback. I usually do leave feedback, but because of that demand, I didn't! Ironic. But it is a good story overall!

[sg-fignewton.livejournal.com]

I know what you mean - this story may not be written in the most elegant fashion, but the plotline is fun and Eve seems to know her characters, so I think it's worth it.

As for the request for feedback - that's the problem with text vs. voice, isn't it? I took it as a joking request, not a demand. Everyone's mileage varies. :)

[winterstar95.livejournal.com]

I guess I am a little gun shy on this topic. I got into a huge debate over whether or not it was required for readers to leave feedback when I was in the Angel fandom. I wrote quite a bit and sometimes I got feedback and sometimes I didn't. I liked to get it and really did get a little upset when I didn't, but I wasn't going to demand it. Others did - I just thought that it was unreasonable to do that. How many readers of Rowlings books or Goodkinds books actually sit down and write a letter to the author? Some but not all. So I look at my page counts and count myself lucky when someone actually does send feedback!

Donna aka winterstar

[m-dk.livejournal.com]

I might be a) stoned og b) very very slow on the uptake, 'casue I didn't get it.
Totally bummer!
What was it that was runing down at them, that slime?
*am very very confused here*

[sg-fignewton.livejournal.com]

I'm sorry that I'm not quite clear on what you're asking. :(

Did you read the fic, or are you asking about the snippet? If you've just read the snippet and you're wondering what the slime was, why not read the fic? :) If you have read the fic and you're unclear, the slime was the same sort of stuff that's under the floor, as Daniel finds out to his detriment.

If you've read the fic, and you're still unsure, perhaps you might want to e-mail the author for clarification.

[m-dk.livejournal.com]

Oh my GOD! This is really embarresing, I thought it was a drabble I just didn't get, hadn't seen it only was a snippet! :(
Sorry for the stupidity of me, will go andrea it all before asking more stupid questions...
(*Grins* but that the hey, if you can't laugh of your own stupidity, you'll only experience other laughing AT you, now they laugh WITH you!)

[sg-fignewton.livejournal.com]

I'm glad we've cleared it up. :)

You'll note that a lot of reccers here include a snippet of fic with their rec. The idea is to whet the reader's appetite, not necessarily explain the story. I do hope you'll check out the fic, though; it's a fun adventure story!